Rewording a sentence?

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I need to find some ideas to reword the following sentence.

One in particular stood leaning against a long stringy pole with one foot wound around the other, picking at his teeth with a sharp twig.

The reason is that it sounds like his foot was picking at his teeth with a sharp twig. I want to keep the idea without diluting it but not sure. Any suggestions would be grateful.

Answer

"One in particular stood leaning, one foot wound around the other, against a long stringy pole, picking at his teeth with a sharpened twig."

Just changed the word order to remove the implication and altered "sharp" to "sharpened" simply because twigs aren't found 'sharp', you can easily change the word back if you prefer your version.

Rewording a sentence?

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