In my story i wrote "his screams filled the air, chilling us to the bone." but i feel this is a little cliche'. If you can think of a better way to write this i'd love to hear it!
Is there a less cliche' way of writing 'chilled to the bone'?
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- 3+ months ago by CaramelPa...
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- writing, story, cliche
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You need to read novels. Lots of novels. Any novels. Notice that they all have perfect spelling, perfect punctuation, perfect composition. Notice where they use one space and where they use two. Notice that every speaker in a dialog gets a new paragraph, and every paragraph is preceded by a blank line. Notice any writing techniques or figures of speech. Take notes so you know where you found what you know. It takes a lot of reading to be a writer.
The idea is a cliche. What exactly are you trying to tell the reader? That you are a bunch of wimps, chilled to the bone by a scream? That a scream makes you feel cold? That you have no empathy for a man who screams, except that you don't like how it makes you feel? What exactly are you trying to say here? Say that instead.