I wrote a song could u guys tell me what u think ??? look into my eyess?

Question

...Far away now lets  go somewhere we can be alone
I see you everyday
I keep on saying just look into my eyesssss
I have a dream I&rsquo;ve gotta tell you

I see you at school With your girlfriend
It hurts me like it would to any other girll
 I keep on saying just look into my eyesss
                                              chorus
Love is weird and hate is strong
But you keep me begging and hiding
I can&rsquo;t wait for the dayyy

I keep on trying  to ask you
But you keep on turning me downnn
I&rsquo;ve always hated being jealous
But I guess that&rsquo;s lifeee
                                                   chorus
Love is weird and hate is strong
But you keep me begging and hiding
I can&rsquo;t wait for the dayyy
X 2 chorus

Answer

well its an interesting song. you should perhaps look into why you wrote it though. make it longer, add a rhyme or two. honestly, sing it and see if it turns out the way you wanted it

I wrote a song could u guys tell me what u think ??? look into my eyess?

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